We are learning to write edit and recraft our writing.
Sylvia park
St Lukes
PS4
Shazam
At the movies me, mum and aunty went to see the Shazam
Movie. e got popcorn, drinks and maltesers. Once the ads were finish
We Finished
The Movie finally started. My favourite part was when adult Billy Batson
Was fighting evil with his siblings. After the movie was finished I
was
Wanted to see it again but sadly I couldn't. When we got
wanted
out of the movies I got to get ice cream vanilla
ice cream sour gummy worms, chocolate chips and M&MS.
The next night we had Butter Chicken. It was YUMMY!
especially the bread, that was YUMMY too. After eating I played my PS4
For a bit. on the the second to last day we went to Sylvia Park.
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me went H&M and other clothes shops. After that my aunty
we
Went to paknsave . me and mum went to Lush and the warehouse.
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When we got home I was tired and wanted to sleep. That’s what I did for
My Holiday.
my holiday
To write my story I made plan at the top of the
page.then I wrote my story underneath the green
writing shows the editing I have done and the red marks
show what Mr.Masters helped me with.
